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Revision Scene 2: Up Forget-me-not Street
The second scene needed less work than I'd expected. I changed a bit of dialogue so that two secondary characters' actions made more sense, and made somebody Mention the War where it seemed especially called-for. I hadn't even suspected that it had come near Langdale when I was writing the early chapters, far less that it would bear directly on the ongoing foul-ups there. That emerged during the Rising Arc, and the details during the first revision pass.
With this scene I conclude the first chapter, and catch up a bit on my quota. The three scenes of the second chapter are the rest of my work for this week.
With this scene I conclude the first chapter, and catch up a bit on my quota. The three scenes of the second chapter are the rest of my work for this week.