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Apr. 9th, 2011 08:06 pmKiller-Kate and Luke Lackland: 830 words, and the end of Kate's Speech, and with it the chapter of the Grey Wolf in the Red Gloaming. Not before time. Any number of days just lately, it's had me about ready to howl!
The main problem with it in its present form is that Kate, at what ought to be her most rhetorically wolvish, is still sounding a bit too much like a certain other Gray-Hame, and generally if you want to stir downtrodden and defeated insurgents to storm their overlord's stronghold, you are probably not wanting me to do the speechifying. This one is going to want distilling into something more like brandy-wine before it is fiery enough for this winter's tale to want it.
Three more chapters and the epilogue left now. Next, the great battle and climax of the Rising.
The main problem with it in its present form is that Kate, at what ought to be her most rhetorically wolvish, is still sounding a bit too much like a certain other Gray-Hame, and generally if you want to stir downtrodden and defeated insurgents to storm their overlord's stronghold, you are probably not wanting me to do the speechifying. This one is going to want distilling into something more like brandy-wine before it is fiery enough for this winter's tale to want it.
Three more chapters and the epilogue left now. Next, the great battle and climax of the Rising.
