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Finished revising the first scene this morning. Getting through this week's remaining four will require a slight acceleration.
What I Did:
- Changed the opening narrative voice from the one I started with, to the one the story acquired as it evolved. Exit Alan Eaton's redaction of an unattributed Allingdale folk-tale: enter Carrie-Anne Booklorn's redaction of the Fairfields folk-epic of the Rising, as told by romantic Hick-Mack-Heck and earthy Sairey Salt-the-Stew. The telling is now finer-grained, and closer to a peasant's-eye view, than the way I began it.
- Backfilled some of the consequences of the way I later developed Northdales history.
- Sneaked some incluing and Chekhovian gunnery into the scene.
- Made the village of Blackwaterside into more of a particular place and less of a generic backdrop, in keeping with the way I depicted the Langdalehead region when my characters finally got back to it.
- Patched some shoddy prose, which henceforth may be taken as read for every scene.
Scene Two is another that will need quite a bit of work, in the light of where I took all the stuff in it later. I'll see what I can do about that tonight...
What I Did:
- Changed the opening narrative voice from the one I started with, to the one the story acquired as it evolved. Exit Alan Eaton's redaction of an unattributed Allingdale folk-tale: enter Carrie-Anne Booklorn's redaction of the Fairfields folk-epic of the Rising, as told by romantic Hick-Mack-Heck and earthy Sairey Salt-the-Stew. The telling is now finer-grained, and closer to a peasant's-eye view, than the way I began it.
- Backfilled some of the consequences of the way I later developed Northdales history.
- Sneaked some incluing and Chekhovian gunnery into the scene.
- Made the village of Blackwaterside into more of a particular place and less of a generic backdrop, in keeping with the way I depicted the Langdalehead region when my characters finally got back to it.
- Patched some shoddy prose, which henceforth may be taken as read for every scene.
Scene Two is another that will need quite a bit of work, in the light of where I took all the stuff in it later. I'll see what I can do about that tonight...
